Saturday, October 4, 2008

revision plan

Editing

-       take out some commas that are not needed and only used to break up speech.

-       Fix the past and present verb tenses in my paper and make sure they are consistent.

-       Fix run on sentences

Revise

-       get rid of this, and it’s throughout my paper and replace them with more powerful descriptive words

-       transitions from one paragraph to the next

-       ending> need to find a way to communicate what lessons I took with me or what I learned from the experience> need to take back the elixer to my ordinary world> also communicate what the readers cdan learn from the story without sounding to cliché 

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